Loner [called] Shard

[[Ridge] of [Sapphire] light]

I look like this
My curse is Shard
I am called a tom
I was born one moon ago
I hail from no where
My title is loner

Description-
The strong brownish orange colord of this young tom stnads out in the sun light like the fire of a careless spark on the autumn colored forest floor. HIs strong body is lithe and lean, though his short fur allows his strong muscles to ripple and slide vibrantly. HIs Vibrant Emerald eyes never stop on a single thing unless it is something he wants. his short and thick fur is coarse, allowing watter to run off it without soaking in. He has long black claws that curl slightly when extended the full ammount. They are erfect for hooking into prey's flesh. He has white on the edge of his paws, tail and just under his nose above his mouth giving him a slight moustache look. He also has light orange markings just above his eyes giving him the look of a wise old tom. His tail is long and ringed with swirling colors of opposing orange. His flanks, likewise, are aranged with the swirling colors of orange. His belly, though, has a single, thin, white line that runs from just under his chin and follows his belly, fading the the left and right it fades into the orange and brownish colors. HIs ears are large and perfect for hearing and his nose twitches non stop and he has a great sense of smell.
Personality-
Greedy, self-centered, arrogent, and selfish. Those are the words chosen by most to describe him. He knows what he wants and knows, always, how to get it. he has a strong overbearing personality, and isn't afraid to tell someone they are wrong. He has values, that center around himself and what his parents hve taught him that he doesn't think ridiculs. He holds strong opinions about many thing, and is never afraid to voice them. He is quick learner and some would say a know it all. He loves to learn things, be it fighting skills, or gossip. He loves to know everyones bussiness and tell them how to fix their lives. He's never afraid and has learned how to do many things by himself. He caught his first bird when he was just able to walk. He is over patient and can stay in one place for hours waiting. He can be short and quick to nit pick, but if you can stand him...he'll be the best friend you could ever have, His heart is dark, though, so friends, aren't something he needs or wants. His mind is filled with thoughts of ambition and he knows what he wants and when he wants it and will do kill to get what he wants. no matter who it is.

Some things should be left in my past
This young one month old tom born two two loners. HIs mothers name is Aresi, a shecat of great wisdom. HIs fathers muscular body, which Shard know holds, is called Sharg. he was born on a Dark and stormy night in the middle of the den, he was the second tom kit born. HIs mother is bringing him up in the life of a true lonerm and he respects his parents greatrly. He has met his mother and father's friends where they used to hang out near a river in the loner lands. when they moved to the new lands with the clans he had to be carried most of the way because he was small. His paws are strong and could go the distance at his own pace, but not at the pace of adult cats. So he had to be carried, by his father. He is very fond of His father and wants to be more like him.
Those I hold "dear"
Mother-> Aersei
Father-> Sharg
Sister-> Noir
Sister-> Treila
Brother-> Reish
Brother-> Raj
This is me...
The leaves of the autumn day drifted down around the young tom. He lay still on the ground the leaves covering, and surrounding him. HIs dark orangeish brown pelt seemed to melt into the ground and his bright emeraled eyes darted this way and that. He had something in mind... something...dark and mysterious. He hadn't told his parents of his plans, but just left to find what he wanted, which inceidentily, was food. His breathing was shallow and slow, almost not at all. Finally something moved to his left and his eyes darted to meet it. He flicked his ears forward the white tufts on the back shinning in the light of sun high. His tail twitched slightly the white on the end moving just enough to be noticed. A bird, large, and stupid turned it's head. Shard twitched his tial again and the bird moved toward him curious. The red breast on the bird matched the shad of the red leaves around the tom and matched even the toms fur himself. The tips of his paws were white and so was a faint bit of his mouth just under his nose. Giving him a moustache look. His emerald eyes gleamed as the bird hopped closer tilting it's head back and forth. As it hopped close to his tail, he lept and the bird gasped befor opening it's wings. Shard was already on top of the bird his mouth closing around it's throat before it could even utter a call. His claws dug into the birds sides and it dropped to the ground with out a call or twitch. Shard gave a satisfied snort and licked the blood from his lips. He sat down and cleaned his paws before devoreing the bird in a few bites and turning for home.
Motto/Themesong - I'll do what I have to to get what I want...no matter what it is.

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REJECTED.

add a bit to his history, about his parents

[[Ridge] of [Sapphire] light]

how can i add something to A Kits history without makeing it like an IC?

[shadowfang]

Ask Windy and Vole about Aersei and Sharg's life before they had Shard. Like Autumn said, add a bit about them.

[[Ridge] of [Sapphire] light]

hope that works out for y'all =>

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Better :3 ACCEPTED.